by Mindy ObenhausRecently,
a fellow author and I were discussing opening scenes, why some really grabbed
hold of the reader’s attention while others lacked punch, despite having key
elements such as the h/h meeting quickly, goal, motivation and conflict, etc.
An
opening scene needs to be engaging and make the reader care about the character
enough to embark on their journey with them and see it through to the end. But
that doesn’t mean that all openings are cast from the same mold, does it? Curious,
I went back and looked at the opening scenes of some of my books.
Just
in my two most recent releases things varied considerably. In A Father’s
Promise, book one in my Bliss, Texas series, the hero and heroine don’t even
see each other until the end of the first scene. And when they do, it’s barely
a glimpse and they don’t speak to each other. While in book two, A Brother’s
Promise, the h/h are conversing by the bottom of page one.
I
write for Love Inspired Books and one of their must-haves is that the hero and
heroine meet in the first scene. However, whether they lay eyes on each other
on page one or page fifteen or somewhere in between depends on the story. Wherever
it happens, though, readers need to be engaged from the get-go. If they’re not,
they’ll put the book down and we don’t want that.
So
how does one craft an opening that will make readers want to keep reading?
Goal,
motivation and conflict
– You’ve heard this over and over again. Every character has to have a GMC not
only for the story, but for each and every scene. In chapter one, though, it’s
their story goal, motivation and conflict that needs to be established so the
reader knows what the character wants, why they want it and what stands in
their way. It’s what makes us want to cheer them on. Now, that’s not to say
that their GMC might not change at some point during their story, but in the
opening scene, it’s what starts them on their journey and invites the reader to
join them. And it needs to presented ASAP.
Stakes – What’s at stake goes hand-in-hand
with GMC. Stakes are what will (or could) happen if they don’t achieve
their goal. In A Father’s Promise the heroine wants to name a guardian
for her infant daughter so that if the heroine (who has no family) were to die,
her daughter would be taken care of by someone who loved her. The stakes are
that if she doesn’t name a guardian and something does happen to her, the
daughter would become a ward of the state. Stakes are the driving force behind
each goal.
Inciting
incident – Once we know
our character’s goal, motivation and conflict and what’s at stake, it’s time to
contemplate the inciting incident. This is when something about the hero and
heroine coming together changes the trajectory of their goal and/or life.
Needless to say, when my heroine in A Father’s Promise sees her baby’s
father, she knows her life is about to change in some way. In A Brother’s
Promise, it’s when Christa learns that Mick is now the guardian of his
five-year-old niece and she can’t help but reach out to them in hopes of making
the transition easier for little Sadie. The inciting incident is what brings the
hero and heroine together and often results in a common goal. But we can’t
simply bring them together. No, we want to…
Rock
their world – Example,
my very first book was a secret baby story. Of course, the heroine knew her
life was about to change as soon as she saw the hero she believed turned his
back on her and her son nine years prior. However, the hero didn’t learn about
the boy until chapter three. Then an editor asked me to revise it, stating that
she wanted him to find out sooner. So I reworked things, bumped it up a little,
though not by much and said editor bought the book. Imagine my surprise when I
received my edits where she stated she wanted the hero to learn about the boy
at the end of the first chapter. At the time, I wasn’t too thrilled about that,
but I soon saw how right she was. Instead of simply seeing the girl he loved
and whose heart he’d broken, his world was rocked by the knowledge that he had
a son!
In
my August 2021 release, the hero and heroine both want to purchase an abandoned
castle. The owner refuses to sell but issues a counteroffer. The h/h—who can’t
get through a church committee meeting without butting heads—must work together
in exchange for exclusive rights to use the castle as an event center and a museum.
When
trying to come up with a rock-their-world moment, it helps to use an approach
you all have heard me mention before. Ask yourself what’s the worst thing that
could happen to that character at that moment and then find a way to make it
happen. It can be a challenge, but it works.
When
crafting the opening of your book, remember you only get one chance to make a
first impression. If you don’t grab an editor’s/reader’s attention within the
first few pages, they may not keep reading and that’s never good. Instead, we want to
capture their attention with an opening that makes them want to journey with
the characters all the way through to that satisfying ending.
Writers,
what strategies do you employ for an opening with impact? Readers, what sorts
of story openings capture your attention?
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Award-winning author Mindy Obenhaus is passionate about touching readers with Biblical truths in an entertaining, and sometimes adventurous, manner. She lives on a ranch in Texas with her husband, two sassy pups, countless cattle, deer and the occasional coyote, mountain lion or snake. When she's not writing, she enjoys spending time with her grandchildren, cooking and watching copious amounts of the Hallmark Channel. Learn more at www.MindyObenhaus.com
