I have a book due in less than
three weeks. The story is out of my head and on the page, the metamorphosis from
idea to book almost complete. But before I can submit this story, it must be finessed.
Finessing involves skillful
maneuvering. As writers, we need to skillfully, purposefully, write our stories in a way that takes readers on a journey and leaves them basking in the glow of a satisfying ending.
When finessing a manuscript,
there are certain things I look for.
Have I adequately described each setting?
Each and every scene needs a sense of place to ground it, otherwise you just have talking heads.
However, too much description can bore a reader. Too little leaves them wanting
and maybe even feeling a little lost. Determine what aspects of your setting are important, then sprinkle those details throughout the scene. Also, ask yourself if you’re showing the
reader the scene, allowing them to see it through the POV character’s eyes, or if
you’re telling them.
Showing is always better because it allows the reader to
experience the story.
Strong word choices.
Is your
character running, hurrying, scurrying or speeding? Each of these words means,
essentially, the same thing, but which is best for the context of your scene?
If it’s a lighthearted scene, your heroine might be scurrying to gather things for a party. On the other hand, your police office hero would
likely race or speed to the scene of an accident.
What words best fit the
emotion and feel of your scene?
Are my characters actions/reactions believable and appropriate?
When I receive my line edits, they sometimes contain
notes from my editor saying things like, “This seems out of character for her.” Or “His reaction is too strong,” or even, “Not strong
enough.”
Whether it’s in word, thought or action, a character’s
response to an event or comment, needs to fit not only who the character is becoming,
but who they are at their core. Yes, your meek heroine might need to show a little
backbone, but does her response show growth and change, that she’s finally
standing up for herself, or does she simply come off as rude?
Even as they change, your characters will remain true to their essence.
Even as they change, your characters will remain true to their essence.
Characters’ journey.
Reading is about watching someone embark on a
journey. Hopefully, your main characters
have grown during the course of your story. But will the reader be able to see that
growth?
When a baby is born, he or she is
completely helpless. Newborns can’t feed themselves. They can’t hold up their little heads. They can't sit up and they’re
only mobile when someone carries them from one place to another. Yet week by week, month by month, they change and grow. So by the
time baby’s first birthday rolls around, he or she can do all of these things and more.
No matter how long or short the timeframe
of your story, the characters need to grow and change. But don’t just ask
yourself what they can do at the end of the story that they couldn’t do at the
beginning. Make sure your reader knows how they got there. Show those baby steps
of growth along the way. How did the heroine who was deathly afraid of horses
end up being comfortable in the saddle?
And if you’re writing for the Christian market, don’t forget about their spiritual journey.
And if you’re writing for the Christian market, don’t forget about their spiritual journey.
Writing a book is a process. All of the elements have come together for a story to be successful. Taking the time to finesse will help ensure the finished product is the best it can possibly be.
Now it's your turn. Readers, in your opinion, what makes a good book great? Writers, how do you know when your manuscripts are ready to submit?
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Three-time Carol Award nominee, Mindy Obenhaus, writes contemporary romance for Love Inspired Books. She’s passionate about touching readers with Biblical truths in an entertaining, and sometimes adventurous, manner. When she’s not writing, she enjoys cooking and spending time with her grandchildren at her Texas ranch. Learn more at www.MindyObenhaus.com
Hi Mindy:
ReplyDeleteI think a great book will move you along on your own personal character arc and leave you a different person than when you first picked up the book. It will also provide such a moving emotional experience that you know as you are reading it that it will forever hold a firm place in your memories. You may even turn right to page one after reading the last page because you know that with each reading you will uncover more layers of meaning that will make you feel the joy of being a discoverer.
That's about it for now. Of course a great book will cover the many useful points you mention in today's post. Thanks,
Vince
Vince, you're right, many readers have been impacted by books. As authors, especially of Christian fiction, we always hope to touch lives, or at least that one God called us to write that book for.
DeleteHave you ever finished a book and then gone right back to page one? I can't say I've ever done that.
Hi Mindy:
DeleteIt may be just me but I could name at least thirty books I've started rereading immediately. Sometimes that book was so beautiful and the language so poetic I wanted to 'hear' it again just like you might want to rehear a wonderful song that you just heard for the first time.
Some other times the book has moved me to feeling unsettled and I want to reread it at once to better absorb the life lessons it seems to be showing. As a writer I will reread a book immediately if the author has done something I want to study and something I particularly admire. Many of these rereads are short on pages and long on emotional impact.
Some books I wonder how anyone could refrain for reading again immediately afterwards. It's like getting seconds of a great food while you are still hungry and craving for it. I just had to reread "The Great Cycle," "Talk Before Sleep," "The Old Man and the Sea",for example.
If you don't want the book to end, start it again!
I have actually found that rereading can be more enjoyable than the first read. It's like eating a great meal for the first time and not knowing the restaurant or what the meal consisted of and also being rushed to get back to the babysitter while being distracted by all the new things, smells, and noises going on. That seat next to the kitchen door didn't help much either. Sensory overload! Just think how wonderful that meal could be the next time when you have time to enjoy and savor every bite at your leisure all with a seat with a view of the ocean. Ah!
Or as Andy Williams sings:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=tRAxcFdyWSo
and sometimes the fineness can only be expressed best during the second time around. :}
Vince, how did you know I'm an Andy Williams fan? And I will attest to the fact that love IS better the second time around.
DeleteMindy, this is spot-on and a good checklist. It's important when you're working without a contract, when you're pitching to editors and agents, because you want to present your story the best you can. And it's also important when you have a contract, because if you catch something it's one less thing your editor has to catch. Meaning you're that far ahead and On To The Next Book.
ReplyDeleteI'm reworking a manuscript with my crit partner and I'm seeing, through her eyes and my own, places where I should have gone deeper. Fortunately it's not under contract so I'm not under the gun, but I want to make it the best I can NOW.
Working from home this morning so will be back later.
Kathy Bailey
Good morning, Kathy. No matter where we are in our writing career, we always want to strive to put our best foot forward. For me, having a check list, even a mental one, helps me stay on task and make sure I haven't overlooked anything. Because goodness know, I'm good at overlooking things. ;)
DeleteWell, Mindy, it's hard NOT to overlook stuff. A book is such a complex thing. If we do it right...And I love the word "finesse."
DeleteI love that word, too, Kathy. And yes, no matter how many times I pour over a ms before submitting, there always seems to be a word missing here and there or a typo. We will never be perfect. At least not in this life.
DeleteYep, these are all things that need work on my subsequent drafts. Great checklist!
ReplyDeleteFor me, I know MSS are ready when they pass the gut check. If something isn't quite ready, I'll always have a niggling unsettledness.
Samantha, I know exactly what you mean by gut check. Sometimes something just doesn't feel right, but you don't know what it is. So, we just have to keep looking--and praying--until we find the issue.
DeleteWhat a great post, Mindy! This is such a great reminder to take the time to do more of the detail work--the polishing. I especially love the one about character actions being believable and appropriate. I have to watch that my characters don't overreact! When I get on a roll, enjoying writing a scene, I tend to get a little overly dramatic. :)
ReplyDeleteLOL, Missy. I'm the same way. Which, of course, is why I had to include it. Glad to know I'm not the only one with a flare for the dramatic.
DeleteYeah, preaching to the choir here. Or the worship team. The best way to keep your characters IN character is deep POV. Which is not easy as we all know. And hard to come out of. I've driven over curbs when I was "in character." Sigh.
DeleteKATHY!!!! Do not let your characters drive! You could get hurt.
DeleteAbout Characters:
DeleteI remember from a class this about realistic character reactions:
Don't write what you want your character to do and don't write what the plot wants your character to do: write what your character would actually do! You want verisimilitude? This is how to get it.
But no! The plot needs something different!
Well author, you have a choice: either change the plot or go back and change the backstory, foundation, or foreshadowing.
Of course, one can always settle for contrivance. "A Contrivance of Convenience"…I may want to write that story. :)
Great post, Mindy! I'm with Missy. "Keeping it real" for our characters is key to making a story great. Their actions, words, and thoughts need to stay consistent with who they are throughout the book. Readers will catch it when they act "out of character."
ReplyDeleteAs for knowing when a manuscript is ready . . . I guess it's when there are no more big fixes that can be made to make the story stronger, and I'm just playing with minor words. :)
Jeanne, I don't know about you, but I can waste a lot of time playing with those minor words. ;)
DeleteFinessing a story is my favorite part, those final tweaks that really polish and make the story shine. You've done a good job describing some of the things to watch for!
ReplyDeleteYou know, Erica, I think that's my favorite part, too, because the hard part of getting the story out of my head and on paper is done and now get to make it pretty.
DeleteA great story for me is one where the characters are in the same place in life as I am so I can find help and encouragement from it. Of course, having the hero be a cowboy who loves and respects his lady doesn't hurt either. Now if I could just find one of those!
ReplyDeleteLinda - rayorr (at) bellsouth (dot) net
Linda, it's always good when we find a book/characters we can relate to. Like you said, encouragement. And handsome cowboy is always a bonus. ;)
DeleteIt's always hard for me to believe a book is truly ready. No matter how many edits it's gone through, I always wonder if there was something else I could have done to make it stronger. Maybe I just need to follow your excellent list.
ReplyDeleteAmy, each and every book we write is a learning and growth experience. In the meantime, we have editors, beta readers or critique partners to aid us knowing when something needs to be stronger.
DeleteThis may be a simplistic answer but even more than the subject, the setting or the characters, it is when you can't stop reading but then, you slow down because you don't want the story to end!
ReplyDeleteBlessings!!
Spoken like a true lover of the written word, Connie. :D
DeleteThis is such a rich post, Mindy! Thank you. Lots of layers...and info that is so important to make the final submission shine like the Hope Diamond! Love your writing and your stories. Your finesse works perfectly!
ReplyDeleteDebby, you are too doggone sweet for your own good. Love you.
DeleteGreat post, Mindy. Lots of good suggestions. I will refer to this when I get to that stage. Please put me in the drawing.
ReplyDeleteYou are entered, Sandy.
DeleteAs a reader I find that a great story is one where the characters just will not leave me. I love them, I have a vested interest in their lives, they are complicated.
ReplyDeleteMary, I love characters like that.
DeleteHi Mindy:
ReplyDeleteI was reading the blurb for "Her Colorado Cowboy" and noticed the hero runs a rodeo school. Do you get much into what it would be like to go to such a school? I would really like to know what the rodeo courses were like. I ran a real estate school for over 30 years and I could sure relate to the problems of running a independent private school.
Vince
Vince, in the story, the hero is preparing to open a rodeo school. The new facility is being built. There's discussion of the different aspects of rodeo and a small amount of attention to roping, but the main focus, of course, is on the romance.
DeleteHi Mindy, thanks so much for this post. I've only written one novel but I found the "finessing" part to be just as fun as the actual writing part. It's surprising how many layers can be added to bring characters and story to life by adding, subtracting, changing or tweaking scenes through the entire manuscript.
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