Hello everyone, Winnie
Griggs here. Back in January I posted about writing book blurbs (you can read
that post HERE) and promised you a Part 2. So today I'm delivering on that
promise.
First a caveat - this is
just my thoughts on what makes up a good blurb. There are likely other methods
that are as effective if not more so.
First let’s talk about
what goes into a blurb.
I consider that these the four components are the minimum of what you need.to
create an effective blurb.
- The Tag Line
- The Characters:
- The Conflict:
- The Close:
For the purposes of this
series of posts, I’m going to use the blurb from the first book I had to craft
a blurb for all on my own. We’ll look at what I did right, what I did wrong,
and what I might do differently today. It’s for my book The Unexpected Bride,
an April 2019 release. It reads as follows:
Fleeing an arranged marriage, socialite Elthia Sinclare accepts a governess position halfway across the country. But when she arrives in Texas she finds more than she bargained for - more children, more work and more demands. Because Caleb Tanner wants a bride, not a governess. But marrying this unrefined stranger is better than what awaits her back home, so Elthia strikes a deal for a temporary marriage. She says I do and goes to work—botching the housework, butting heads with her new spouse, loving the children.
Caleb isn’t sure what to make
of this woman who isn’t at all what he contracted for—she’s spoiled, unskilled
and lavishes her affection on a lap dog that seems to be little more than a
useless ball of fluff. But to his
surprise she gets along well with the children, works hard to acquire domestic
skills and is able to hold her own with the town matriarchs.
Could the mistake that landed
him with this unexpected bride be the best thing that ever happened to him?
So today I want to
dig into the first component.
The Tagline.
Technically, the tagline
is optional, but I think having one adds a little extra punch to your blurb.
The Tagline, also called a log line, is a very short teaser, designed to hook
the reader and introduce the tone of the book. There are several different ways
to approach this.
- You can do the A meets B format. Here’s an example
Jane Austen meets Sherlock Holmes in this new Regency mystery series
(from Erica Vetsch’s Jan 2022 release The Debutante’s Code)
Another version of this format is to simply reference to the genre/tropes you’re mashing together – i.e. A regency era female turns detective in this new mystery series. (My apology to Erica if I didn’t properly capture the tone of her book) - You can pose a question, as in this one
As her plans unravel, can she give her children what they truly need?
(from Mindy Obenhaus’s Nov 2021 release Their Yuletide Healing) - Then there’s the contrast method. She mixed danger, desperation, and deception together. Love was not the expected outcome.
- And lastly, you can simply showcase the heart of
the story as was done in the blurb for my upcoming May 2022 release Her
Amish Springtime Miracle.
In this delightful and heartwarming novel, an orphaned baby brings together an unlikely couple who learn the true meaning of family.
(from Mary Connealy’s March 2022 release The Element of Love)
Unfortunately, I didn’t
include a tagline for The Unexpected Bride (shame on me!). So if I were to try to craft one
today, how would I go about it? Well, let’s see how it might look using each of
the four methods above.
Using method one: A runaway heiress must serve as housekeeper and nanny in this accidental Mail Order Bride story
Using the second method: Can a klutzy socialite who ends up far from home provide the care and love six orphaned children and their determined uncle so desperately need?
Using the third method: She ran away from home to escape an unwanted engagement. So how did she end up agreeing to marry a disagreeable stranger?
And using the last method: In this heartwarming story, an inept runaway socialite must build a loving home for six orphaned children and their much too serious uncle.
So which one would I
actually use? The test would be which one I thought provides the best hook while remaining true to the story. Right now I'm thinking it would be the third one.
A couple of tips:
- Just because the tagline appears at the top of your blurb doesn’t mean it needs to be created first. If you’re having problems figuring it out, craft the rest of your blurb first and then come back to it. Hopefully the key tone and story essence you want to convey will pop out to you then
- To figure out what part of your book would make the best hook, ask yourself what is most unique or interesting about your story.
There you have it, my notes on how to craft your book blurb’s tagline. Next time we'll look at the second component, the characters.
So do you have any
questions? Do you agree with this approach? Would you have chosen (or crafted)
a different tagline for TUB than the one I chose?
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I love looking at this formulaic way of creating a tagline.... Winnie you are clearly part-genius, part amazing person. Why have I never looked at it this way??? Copying this for me and Beth because taglines aren't easy!!!!!
ReplyDeleteLOL, clearly I'm neither, but thanks for suggesting I might be :)
DeleteRuthy is right, taglines are never easy!
ReplyDeleteI really needed this tutorial today, Winnie! Your timing is fabulous.
I also love the way you break down the process. You make it seem a lot less intimidating!
Thanks Jan! And I'm so glad to hear it came at a good time for you.
DeleteBlurbs ARE hard and I like this method. I like formulas and rubrics anyway, so there you go. Give me a list anytime! I was going for Door Number Two because it was lively and had words like "klutzy," but you're right, three is the best overall. It links her past with her present dilemma and cuts to the heart of the real issue. The kids are great, but at the heart of it the real issue is between Him and Her. 50 percent each, since it's a romance.
ReplyDeleteGood ideas, Winnie, and we need to hook the potential reader in, what is it now? Three seconds? I've lost count.
May be back later,
Kathy Bailey
Your Kaybee
Summing it all up in New Hampshire
Hi Kathy. I think we're all in agreement about blurbs being hard to write. :)
DeleteAnd I too like specific methods and formulas for tackling such things - breaking it down into components makes tackling the task much less intimidating
Great post, Winnie! You are a wonderful teacher. This is a post to save...which is exactly what I'm doing. Thanks!
ReplyDeleteThanks Debby, glad you found some value in it.
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